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Examine the argument in favor of and against personal growth and come to a conclusion on this thought

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Introduction In earlier days I wanted to become a computerized
games
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game
 developer, but with the passage of time my priorities changed and now I made my final
decision
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 to become a UX/UI designer. There
are
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is
 a plethora of reasons why I am excited and interested in
this
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 field.
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First reason
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The first reason
 is that I plan to follow in the footsteps of my cousin. I just love his work;
for
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instance not
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instance, not
 reporting to anyone and working freelance, handling many projects at the same time. At the earlier stage of Life “Step out of your comfort zone, or situations will force you to come out”. As a
kid I
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kid, I
 was not aware of my
future
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 plans, always playing games, getting poor marks, hanging out with friends and even worse I started failing in exams.
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 I was going with the flow in my comfort zone. As soon I started realising things that I have to do something before things fall out of hand.
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Hence I
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Hence, I
 joined
engineering school
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the engineering school
 to pursue my goal of becoming a computerized game developer. Learning Curve At
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 stage, I was a mature man worried about his
future
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, graduated in computer science and looking for a
job
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.
Fortunately one
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Fortunately, one
 of my
good
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best
 friends offered me a
job
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 of
junior web developer
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junior web developers
 in a well reputed company.
Everyday
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Every day
i
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I
learnt
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learned
 new things and realised that industrial jobs are way more advanced than the study
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have done. To make games I have to learn more coding languages and some 3D animation softwares. I was confused and did not know what to do. Along with
this
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 my seniors were happy with my work and decided to give me an entire project. I do not know
why but
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why, but
 I started enjoying myself while in the research and design phase of the project and I gave my best to that project. Life changing
decision
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 for
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future
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the future
 Everything happens for a reason, due to some critical reasons I have quit my
job
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. I was worried about my
future
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 and had a
decision
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 with my father. He guided me to study
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 abroad,
this
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 will give me an interval from hectic
job
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 life and help me focus on my career.
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, I made a
decision
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 to take a design course and Canada is known for the best education and
this
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 led me to take admission in Interactive media management in Conestoga College.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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