Some countries are struggling with an increase in the rate of crime.Many people think that having more police on the streets is the only way to reduce crime. To what extent do you agree?

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The number of committed crimes is currently rising in some countries.That fact bothers people

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and some of them come up with solutions to that problem.Many of them believe that if there are more

police

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officers on the streets the percentage of crime will fall.From my point of

view it

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view, it

can partially help solve the problem. A lot of crimes that are being committed on the streets can be prevented by the

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, most of the

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officers work

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their offices and only a few of them protect citizens and patrol on the streets.

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why it is easy for delinquents to commit crimes

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such

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as shoplifting, pickpocketing

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mugging etc.They might

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injure passers-by and violate public policy. But if there

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police

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officers patrolling on the streets,

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the risk of getting caught will be higher for lawbreakers. They will no longer be able to get away with the crime they committed and will surely be sentenced.I believe it will make them watch their

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manner of acting or controlling yourself

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and don’t trouble the public.

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officers can protect society and stabilize public order, they cannot prevent all the crimes.Economic and social problems

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as unemployment, poverty,

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hunger, etc.

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can make people commit crimes.Those are huge problems that the

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aren’t able to solve.

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, if they send a shoplifter to prison, after being

released he

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released, he

/she will continue robbing as it is the only way for him/her to survive. In my opinion, governments should join the

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to find effective means of preventing crimes.

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example

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example, instead

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of punishing poor lawbreakers with a fine

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they should force them to do unpaid public work and

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help them find a real job.They should

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show the criminals the right way to behave

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earn money and live. I think after taking those measures the number of crimes will drop. In conclusion,

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officers can prevent a lot of crimes. Yet, there are social problems that they cannot solve alone.I partially agree with the idea that having more patrols on the streets is the only way to decrease the amount of crimes.

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