The qualities a person needs to become successful in today’s world cannot be learned at a university or similar academic institutions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

I truly agree that to become a quality person is not born to be, everyone
have
Suggestion
has
to accumulate their knowledge, life experience and
work
experience to combine a whole. A company most preferred gives opportunity to high academic or qualified person rather than secondary school graduates, they thought that someone with high qualifications would be an invisible guaranteed on their
work
efficiency and
productive which
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productivity, which
productivity which
productively which
may benefit to the company;
however more
Accept comma addition
however, more
and more organizations nowadays discovered that human
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
at
work
place, responsibilities and self-discipline are
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
topics that cannot
learned
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learn
from university,
therefore
the management will organize different team spirit trainings for their employee to participate. On the job training or team spirit course will refresh the working team to understand their advantages and disadvantages, how to review and improve their technique, confidence and social skills. On the training session, staff will have
chance
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a chance
the chance
to know more about their co-workers which they may not connect very often during
work
, it will improve their relationship and
work
atmosphere. Universities begin to realize that complex learning syllabus covering academic and social studies would be the key element of future success for students.
However
, different from the academic knowledge, social skill or self-confidence is hard to learn from
book
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a book
books
the book
, it’s greatly in associate with family education;
this
is the topic we need to reconsider in the future.
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