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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does Tourism bring more advantages and disadvantages to a country ?

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Travelling is increasing in every part of the world and it is widely promoted. In
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 essay we will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of tourist. To start with, tourism is encouraged in most of the nation due to many reason's.
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, it open's many job opportunities in the country. It
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also help
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also helps
has also helped
 in increasing, the economy of many countries. It as well as
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 bring many peoples together. These economic growth has been attributed to the movement of foreign exchange from wealthy agrarian in another part of the world, where historical and tourist sites are located.
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, Egypt economy has been boosted by the yearly visit's of the tourist's to the pyramids. One of the common disadvantages of tourism is that it could lead to the lost of cultural identity. With the increase of foreigner's in the country, the locals could start speaking with the foreigner language and copy their mode of dressing.
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, the current trend in dressing in the United Arab Emirates has been attributed to the influence of western visitors in the province.
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, the bottom line is that it could result in gradual loss of cultural values. In conclusion, in my opinion,
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 there are drawbacks of tourism, but it provide's job for many local's as well as it improves the economy of many countries. In a nutshell, there are more advantages of the travelling
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 their disadvantages.
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