Experts say older people were happier and healthier in the past because they did more exercise and spent more time with family and friends, whereas many now suffer from loneliness and health problems. What are the causes of this and what are some solutions?

In the past
old
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older
generation were more careful and fit as they participate in more physical activities and eat food high protein and good
quality but
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quality, but
nowadays the young generation are careless and many health related issues
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the what is the
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what is the
problem behind the
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a young person of either sex
youngster
youngsters
and what is the advantages the old generation
Nowadays with
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Nowadays, with
modern technology more and more people on the internet and labour
savings
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saving
machine is the primary cause of people suffering from health related problems
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In
the
past most
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past, most
of
work
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the work
done manually
,
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,
such
as household chores due to people were
more physical
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more physically
fit and
healthy whereas
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healthy, whereas
today people are spending more
time
on
cell phone
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the cell phone
cell phones
and social media during their Free
time
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In
the previous people go out for shopping with family and friends to spend
time
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them, but
now people they can do online shopping in
few hours
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a few hours
without leaving their home Move on to the
next
step all the solution to
this
issue have to sports and exercise in the school and other sports complex curriculum the government should be taken some step to start the physical fitness classes for all the people compulsory
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moreover
at home parents should encourage their kids to play outdoor games and sports activities with friends In conclusion spending more
time
on social media and playing game online will have big effect on the people health the government should be take some step to encourage the people for physical fitness activities their is lot of advantages our life

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Happiness
  • Health
  • Exercise
  • Spending time
  • Loneliness
  • Health problems
  • Causes
  • Solutions
  • Lifestyle
  • Priorities
  • Social interaction
  • Physical activity
  • Advancements in technology
  • Promote
  • Engaging
  • Opportunities
  • Awareness
  • Family
  • Community
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