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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countriesin 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The
charts
 reveal the data
of
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 sources of
eletricity
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electricity
 generated for 4 states in the year 2003.
Overall
, as
it
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apply
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can be seen from the
charts
, India’s major
source
 is
fossil
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a fossil
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fuel
,
while
 Morrocco
use
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uses
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 mainly
hydro
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hydropower
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power
.
According to
charts
, India’s primary
source
 is
fossil
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a fossil
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fuel
 with 82%; it is followed by
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 with
the
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a
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 rate of 14%. Nuclear
power
 is in a small minority for India with 4%. Unlike India, Sweden’s chief sources of electricity are
hyrdo
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hydro
power
 and nuclear
power
 and their rates are similar
with
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 52% and 44%. Using fossil
fuel
 for
electricty
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electricity
 is in a small
minoirty
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minority
 in Sweden and its rate is 4%. There is
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a noticable
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noticable
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noticeable
noticeably
 difference for Morocco which almost entirely consists of
hydro
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hydropower
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power
 as an
electricty
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electricity
source
. In Morocco, fossil
fuel
 usage for
eletricty
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electricity
significantly
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is significantly
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 lower and its
ratie
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rate
ratio
 is 5% and nuclear
power
 does not use
for
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as
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an eletricity
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eletricity
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electricity
source
 in
this
 country.
Wietnam
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Vietnam
 is similar
with
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to
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 Sweden
as
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in
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 regarding
distribution
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the distribution
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 of energy
source
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sources
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 apart from fossil fuels. As is shown in
charts
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the charts
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, the
majoirty
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majority
 of
eletricity
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electricity
source
 is
fossil
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a fossil
the fossil
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fuel
 with more than half in Vietnam and the rest of
source
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the source
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 consists
hydropower
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of hydropower
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. Vietnam and Morocco
is
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are
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 the same in terms of not having nuclear
power
.
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