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Some people think is better for people to change their career at least once in their life and a different kind of jobs. Do you agree with this opinion?

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Change is the essence which is taking place constantly in all spheres of life. There are contrasting views as far as the ramification of switching careers. Some people assert that it is beneficial to do so, whereas others condemn the opposite side of it. Both the views would be illustrated with slight consummate with the former statement. There are
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 of reasons which propitious my view points.
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 and foremost, it is beneficial in the term of job security, business interest and
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money making
. If one is having wide range of opportunities under his belt,
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 he will have a more secure professional life
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 others.
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, it will expand their interest and skills, as a person with two different careers have vast knowledge about separate professions which can lead into a successful living that
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 helps to raise their salary packages.
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, having different options can
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 boost the confidence of individuals and they will be more attentive and active to learn more skills as well as not get bored by doing some tasks. As every coin has two sides, some job seekers are not having enough tendency to learn new skills to the faster pace. They have more issues like changing environment is difficult for them or adjusting in totally opposite sphere is not easy for everyone. To recapitulate, beside changing job is having somewhat demerits, but still is great for the growth of employees as well as they will learn more skills and can gather information about different eras,
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 can learn to use various kinds of technology

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