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Your friend has booked a holiday for both of you. However, you are not happy with the hotel arrangements and want to change them. Write a letter to your friend. In the letter, mention: How excited you are for this holiday with him/her Why are you not happy with the hotel? Which alternatives would you prefer?

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Dear Sunitha, I'm so excited awaiting our holidays. I remember the
last
 meeting when you told me about your plans for a trip with me. I am really surprised
with
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 your coordination and planning ability. When I received your call, I was overwhelmed with joy.
Moreover
, being an adventure enthusiast, it was my long-time dream to visit Kullu and Manali. I'm very thankful to you for choosing
such
 a wonderful paradise on Earth. I got the itinerary send by you through the mail. I am so happy that we are staying there for 6 nights and 1 day. But, sorry to say, I'm not happy with the lodging you have booked for us. I wanted to have a room with a balcony having a mountain view plus dining.
Also
, I prefer the tavern should be in equal/almost near distance from our destinations places. So that, without wasting time we can explore the whole
Himachal
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 Pradesh.
Furthermore
, while checking with one of my friends, the
hotel
 which you booked have some negative reviews and
which
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is far from our destination spots. I have googled for more information and found a
hotel
 named Sun Park
Hotel
, Manali. More than a
hotel
, it is a resort.So we can have some fun time together by playing games and swimming indoor pools. They have their own spa facilities, which will help us to relax from our tiring day roams.
In addition
, the most beautiful part is, it
a
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resort area with views of the Himalayas. Please consider my suggestion and change the plans
in
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accordingly
.
However
, it should be remembered that you will have to obtain a special permit for visiting Rohtang Pass- our
3rd day
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 destination. Looking forward
for
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 your reply and convey my regards to your parents. Yours lovingly, Sadika

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Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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