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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #research #organizations
Scientific
research
 has a potential to
accelarate
move faster
accelerate
 the growth of the modern world. Whether the legislation or the private sector should provide
finance
Suggestion
financial
 and control
this
 scientific inquiry, has become a contentious issue. A group of people says that government should be accountable for supporting the
research
, while others argue that
this
 should be supported by private companies. I personally believe that law making bodies should take control of
this
 system. In
this
 essay we will contend for
formar
referring to the first of two things or persons mentioned (or the earlier one or ones of several)
former
format
 view and will draw an inference. Any type of new
research
 contributes
in
Suggestion
to
 the advancement of the whole community.Government controlled scientific-investigations are paid
of
from a particular thing or place or position
off
 by the taxes paid by the common people,
hence
, it becomes
interest area
Suggestion
an interesting area
interesting area
 of each and every citizen of the nation.
On the other
hand
Accept comma addition
hand, research
research
 sponsored and monitored by private bodies serves the interest predominantly of those bodies, rather than a mass. Will the
research
 driven by private
intitute
set up or lay the groundwork for
institute
, (which is more interested in making money out of the investment) be unbiased?
This
 is a question of vital importance. Whereas, when the investigation is driven by
union
Suggestion
the union
unions
, the interest is completely towards mankind. The
research
 will certainly be a genuine one, even if it takes
time more than expected
Suggestion
more time than expected
.
As a result
, the
sponsorhip
the act of sponsoring (either officially or financially)
sponsorship
 by government ensures effectiveness and well-being of the whole society. To recapitulate, having mulled over above stated arguments and information, and deliberating all the facts, it can be deducted that the law-making body's authority has a substantial influence on the betterment of its people.
Thus
, in my opinion government should be main body to control and finance the
research
.
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