Many people now undertake extreme activities, from hang-gliding to mountain climbing. Why do people risk their lives in this way, and do you think this is a good trend?

The performance of thrilling sports has become widespread among the global population, which is considered to impose a threat to people's lives. Various reasons have been put forward to explain for the surge of the trend and I am in
favor
promote over another
favour
of those who advocate
this
positive new trend. In my views of point, there are 2
reason
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reasons
for
this
question which I will discuss in
this
question.
First
, as can be seen, it is an addictive of
adrenaline which
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adrenaline, which
can be
seem
perceive by sight or have the power to perceive by sight
seen
as the most addictive drugs
such
as cocaine.
For example
, in a film that I was seen for a month, that a man who addicted to climbing on the façade of
high
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the highest
highest
building in New York and he climb all high new buildings. The highest building in Malaysia called Twin
Towers which
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Towers, which
he had climbed
for
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to
2 times. As you know, it is addicted so if he was far away from that kind of activities, he
become
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becomes
sweating and can’t do anything.
Second
is problems that people have to face push them to do these extreme things since in their lives they trying to go through some serious hardships that's why getting closer to the death make them forget about the problems and they see these utmost activities as a relief. When it comes to the talk about whether it is a good idea doing intense activities or not, I think it is
challenging but
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challenging, but
horrible either to the people who don’t want to meet Grim Ripper. It is hard to believe in man who ensure about the well-equipped equipment due to the death of many people on the TV about the new kind of that
activities
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activity
. Nowadays, it is considered so you can try to that
sport
a point located with respect to surface features of some region
spot
at
once but
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once, but
I don’t recommend you to that.
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