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write about the number of people going to fast food restaurants in the years 2003 and 2006 and share your opinion

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The two pie charts presented capture data describing the proportions of 5 different modes of transportation
(
Accept space
(
foot, bus, train, car and other) used by people in a European city to travel between their office and home in 1959 and 2009. Overall, in 1959 the majority of people preferred using their
foot
Suggestion
feet
 over all other facilities available, and a few used other transportation means. Not only is
this
 point clear, but
also
 in 2009 cars became the most common method used to reach office. A specific analysis reveals that cars and other together accounted for 15 percent, which matched with bus and train usage in 1959.
Similarly
, in 2009, combination use of
bus
Suggestion
the bus
 and
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 was at 25%, which paralleled the 25% of walking. Notably, fifty- five% of the population
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
 by foot in 1959 compared to 35% in 2009. The number of people using the train was the same in both the years. On a final note of comparison, the average distance between home to the office almost increased by 15 km and the time is taken to reach the destination
also
 increased to 42 km from the previous of 17km.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Patronage
  • Fast food consumption
  • Convenience
  • Marketing strategies
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Demographics
  • Economic factors
  • Frequency of visits
  • Health concerns
  • Public awareness
  • Menu innovations
  • Technology in food services
  • Accessibility of fast food
  • Health implications
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