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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

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It is often said that
Amphawa
 Floating Market has a
lot
 of things to shop or buy. One
such
 example is that we can buy food
such
 as coconut milk ice cream, seafood, coconut sugar, noodle in
coconut shell
Suggestion
a coconut shell
coconut shells
,
thai
definite article
the
to
this
 desert
,
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,
Mackerels and three
flavors
the general atmosphere of a place or situation and the effect that it has on people
flavours
 crap.
Also we
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Also, we
 can buy clothes
such
 as beauty hat, long dress, T-shirt, cool skirt, chic sandal and short or long pants,
Besides
, we can buy accessories
such
 as pretty bracelet, wonderful Necklaces, cute
hairpin
Suggestion
hair pin
,
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,
cool rubber ban, sunglasses and handmade
keyring
Suggestion
Keyring
. One of the most striking feature is that we can do a
lot
 of activities at
Amphawa
 Floating Market.
That is
 to say we can do exercise
Such
 as do Arabic, running, doing cardio, dancing, jogging and playing badminton. Later we can't sell products
such
 as make ups, small three, handmade bracelet,
second
 clothes
,
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,
 seafood and cute earring. I am
nationally we
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nationally, we
 can take photos of amazing views, places, antique coffee shop, walking street, people lifestyle and traditional restaurant. It is a well-known fact that there are a
lot
 of reasons why we like
Amphawa
 Floating Market.One
instance could
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instance, could
 be 1) There are A
lot
 of Fireflies that you can only
here
perceive (sound) via the auditory sense
hear
.
2)
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2)
There are a
lot
 of antique restaurants.
3)
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3)
There
are
Suggestion
is
 a
lot
 of beautiful
homestay
the quality of being honest
honesty
.
Finally
, we recommend to visit
Amphawa Floating Market
Suggestion
the Amphawa Floating Market
.
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