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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

#people #centres #weekend #markets
It is often said that Market 304 has a lot of thing to buy one
such
 example is we can buy clothes
such
 as S-size shirt, Long pants, canvas shoes, Liverpool sports colorin
g short
a digestible substance used to give color to food
colouring
skirt, winter sweater and pink swimsuit.
Also
, we can buy home appliances
such
 as lamp, large mirror, Flat screen TV, Refrigerator, broom, mop and vacuum cleaner.
Besides
, we can buy foods
such
 as Papaya salad, noodle, chicken rice, Yum Mama, Grilled chicken, Fruit, Vegetable, Coconut ice cream, seafood and Pad Thai One of the most striking feature
s is tha
a prominent attribute or aspect of something
features
t we can do a lot of activities at Market 304, Prachinburi.
That is
 to say we can relax at many different places
such
 as Pub 304, Verona, khlong
rung Z
Suggestion
Khlong
oo, 304 station
, wat k
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stations
ae
w
what thing
what
wait
wet
P
hich
Suggestion
Kaew
cow
key
it, Godzilla Maki, Top coffee and Top Cake. Later, we can sell Cactus
such
 as Flower pot, fertilizer, seed, humus, scree and Flower pot decorations.
Additionally
, we can go sightseeing at many different tourist attract
ion
Suggestion
attractions
such
 as Wat Ton Pho, Pha Tawan, Thorn flower crested Nak, Ka
eng
the part of an organism (human or animal) that connects the head to the rest of the body
neck
 Hin Phoeng Waterfall and Smallpa
nda galler
Suggestion
Small Panda
y. It is a well - known fact that we have a lot reason why we like to go to Market 304 Prachinburi. One instanc
e could be che
Accept comma addition
instance, could
ap p
roduc
Suggestion
cheaper
ts with quality. Apart from
this
, there are tourist attractions nearby that should be visited.
Finally
, the place is suitable for all ages and the atmosphere is not crowded.
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