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Some people prefer shopping in shopping centres while others prefer weekend markets. What are the advantages of each? Which shopping experience do you prefer?

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It is often said that Amphawa Floating Market has a lot of things to sell. One
such
 example is that we can sell animals
such
 as little cats, small rabbits, cute hamsters, tiny squirrels, gold fish, crazy turtles, and happy birds.
Also we
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Also, we
 can sell foods
such
 as spicy spaghetti, pork steak,
chicken steamed
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chicken, steamed
 bun, barbecue chicken, orange juice, mineral water, and chocolate cake.
Besides
, we can sell
secondhand
Suggestion
second hand
 things
such
 as old shoes, silver watch, cheap clothes, thick bag, baby cribs, and comic books. One of the most striking features is that we can buy things at Amphawa Floating Market.
That is
 to say, we can buy clothes
such
 as
red dress
Suggestion
a red dress
, long jeans,
denim skirt
Suggestion
denim skirts
a denim skirt
, winter coat, and dark jacket. Later, we can buy vegetables
such
 as young cucumber, tomatoes, carrots, white mushroom, and pumpkin.
Additionally
, we can buy accessories
such
 as
long necklace
Suggestion
a long necklace
, cool
sun glasses
spectacles that are darkened or polarized to protect the eyes from the glare of the sun
sunglasses
, diamond ring, bright
jewelry
an adornment (as a bracelet or ring or necklace) made of precious metals and set with gems (or imitation gems)
jewellery
, and Gucci belts. It is a well-known fact that we have a lot reasons why we like to go to Amphawa floating market. One
instance could
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instance, could
 be there are many shops. Apart from
this
, we can choose many things.
Finally
, we can negotiate the price of the products.
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