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The best way to ensure the growth of children is to make parents take parenting courses. Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, parenting classes have become popular as these classes help parents to some extent to bring up their children.
Therefore
, some people argue that to ensure the entire development of their children, new parents should attend parenting classes. Personally, I do completely disagree with
this
 view. There are several reasons why parenting courses benefit for new parents.
First
 of all, these courses equip a various range of parenting skills
such
 as child psychology, basic medical training and sort of other skills that allow new parents to protect their children from server diseases stem from carelessness of parents and
also
 parenting skills shortage.
Besides
 that, attending parent courses are not only to have a better understanding of the child via valuable skills, but
also
 places parents and children can join in family activities, which make a great contribution to reinforce the family bond between fathers, mothers and their children.
As a result
, these children are living in safety and love from their own exemplary parents.
On the other hand
, it is impossible to force all parents attend
to
being one more than one
two
 parenting courses because of practical reasons.
Firstly
, many parents need to spend more time making a meeting, that lead to a fact that they do not able to manage to join in the classes.
Furthermore
, there are still many parents who are living under the poverty cannot afford to pay tuition fee at parenting classes, though they have an awareness of the benefits of these classes.
Therefore
,
instead
 of attending to parent classes, they tend to ask their parents and relatives for help in taking care of children. In conclusion,
although
 both views have certainly some validity, it seems to that it is better to not force all new parents attend parenting courses. Alternatively, asking advices from life long experience people in family is easier and more suitable to ensure the growth of the children.
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