Q People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, humans are independent and they are working as well as living any corner in the nation
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Because machinery has increased.
automation
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Automation
is giving more benefits to humans like electronic gadgets, cell phone, automatic vehicles, digital trains, plains and so on
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There are many merits and demerits of new advanced machinery. I will discuss the pros and cons in subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
with
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first
and foremost benefit is
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inflation is decreasing day by day
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in present days youngsters are moving another country for working and studying
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therefore
many juveniles are
earn
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earning
more money
business
and job
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besides
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this
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parents are allowing
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their children for living another country due to parents can talk with their children through internet so they can take care of their juvenile by new technology.Another advantage is
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in modern era digital public transports have launched
then
people can go any place for
business
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for, for
for for
instance
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in Jalandhar numerous of
business
man go to Banglore by plane for doing
business
and they reach in 3 hrs due to
speed
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the speed
of a new transport
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On the other hand
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where there are roses there are thorns
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dark side of the issue cannot be ignored
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one drawback is
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humans do not have time for family
consequently
they always work and using electric gadgets
such
as computer
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cell phone,
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the
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The
reason is family relationships are becoming detrimental. And juvenile is learning illegal things from new devices
as a result
, they commit
crime
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crimes
a crime
if they live separate from parents in out of place
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for
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instance
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a according to research various of
scolar
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholar
scholars
scalars
are living Chandigarh for studying and job
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Numerous of youngsters are facing health problems because they eat junk food and some addict dugs
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    To recapitulate
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would like to pen down if new technology has advantages as well as drawbacks
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So people should not use new things unlimited
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If people can work and living any place if they know about all limitations.
it
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will be better for new generations and society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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