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people eat more processed food than they did in the past.why is this?what are the effects of this?

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Recently, it has been discovered that people consume
processed food more
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more processed food
 than they did before.
This
 could be
as a result
 of their busy lifestyles and the quick access to
such
 foods.
However
,
this
 trend
have proved
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has proven
 to have detrimental health effects. One major reason why persons eat processed foods more, is that they are caught up in their busy schedules. Preparation of processed foods
take
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takes
 less time and is less stressful than making foods fresh.
For example
, it is easier to just microwave a can-packaged meal than cooking same fresh. Another reason is that there is more access to processed foods than in the past. People can make
such
 quick orders with a click of the button from their phones unlike before. The effects of
this
 trend has been well documented. One of
such
 effect is that people who consume processed foods are less healthy than those who do not.
This
 is
as a result
 of being exposed to the various chemicals used to preserve them. A recent study on the consumption of canned foods shows that people who consumed less, has a stronger immune system to prevent diseases than those who did.
However
, a positive effect of
this
 lifestyle is that it has greatly improved commerce.
This
 is so because processed foods can
last
 longer and
thus
 can be transported across countries to be sold. A very good example is the exportation of Titus Sardines which made a landmark profit of N2 Billion dollars
last
 year. In conclusion, it is safe to say that the consumption habits of persons in the past in respect of processed foods has changed due to their busy lifestyles and the accessibility to
such
 foods. Even though it has had negative effects with respect to health, I project that same will continue into the future because of the business benefits it brings.
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