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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most of the people nowadays around the world would like to have the opportunity to stay at home and have some free
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 after all the work they have to do, and through internet shopping, a new
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 of shopping become available. It’s a mean, let the person to order whatever merchandise he or she want to be delivered to their home, by
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 they can get an extra hour to rest at home after a long day of work and doing daily errands.
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, I agree with
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 to do it.
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, some people believe that these kinds of shopping will lead the shops on town and city to be closed, but
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 is just really a dark thought in the people’s mind. Despite, internet shopping makes our life easier, but the traditional
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 of shopping has its own unique pleasure and still from
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 to
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 people would like to go out and buy their own stuff
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. In the end, there is no
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 that the internet shopping could take the traditional
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 to go outside.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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