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The quality of computer language translation has improved significantly in recent years. Therefore, it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#quality #computer #language #translation #years #children
I disagree with the statement ' the quality of computer
language
 translation has improved
significantly recent years
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significantly in recent years
.
Therefore
,
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,
it is not necessary for children to learn a foreign
language
. It's true that humans have become slaves of the technology
.
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.
The
technology which
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technology, which
 was used to make work easier for humans is replacing human capital
altogetherly
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
altogether
. Translators are the most common tools used to translate texts
of
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from
 one
language
 to
another but
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another, but
 the most common issue with
such
 translators is that it isn't grammatically correct.
these
Suggestion
These
 translators were designed to reduce the human effort of going through different dictionaries and books just to translate a text
,
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,
but relying completely on
such
 translators is a mistake
learning
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Learning
 a foreign
language
 has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own perks and advantages
such
 as learning about cultures
,
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,
literatures
,
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,
traditions and sometimes history of a place different than yours. Learning a
language
 not only increases your lingual
skills but
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skills, but
also
 improves your overall
lnowledge
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
Thus i
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Thus, I
Thus I
 believe that completing relying on translators and ignoring the need to learn a new
language
 for children is really bad.

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