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you have dedided to leave your current job even though you enjoy it. write a letter to inform your manager of your decision. in your letter: tell the manager about your decision and the reason for it, describe what you learnt in your current job, and ask the manager to write a reference letter to help you with future employment

Dear Mr Brown I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to formally inform you of my decision to resign from my position as a waiter at Rosy Restaurant.
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 was a difficult decision for me, as I have greatly enjoyed my time working here, and I have learned so much from my experiences and colleagues The reason for my resignation is that I would like to move house to another city with my family. I believe
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 is the right step for a new experience, more convenient for my parents' work, and we
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 want to explore different cultures
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 and ways of life During my time here, I have learned many valuable skills ,
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 as developing effective communication and collaboration skills, customer service, making new friends, and
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 challenging situations. Working at Rosy Restaurant
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 taught me the importance of teamwork
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 and adaptability in a fast-paced environment. I would be so grateful if you could provide me reference letter for my future applications. Your recommendation would be invaluable as I pursue new opportunities. Thank you again for your support and guidance during my time at Rosy Restaurant. Thoai My

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State your reason in a more clear way. Say you are moving to another city with your family, so you must leave the job.
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Add one short line about when you will leave. This makes the letter feel more complete.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like also, because, and so to make ideas join more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Keep each paragraph to one main point only. The skills paragraph has many ideas, so make it a bit more simple.
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You answered all parts of the task: your decision, your reason, what you learned, and the request for a reference letter.
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Your tone is polite and warm, which fits a letter to a manager well.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has a clear opening, body, and closing, so it is easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has a clear job, and this helps the reader understand your ideas.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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