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All cars that burn fossil fuels should be banned and electric cars should replace them. Do you agree or disagree?

#cars #fuels
In today’s motor driven world the concept of electric cars is gaining attention and appreciation declining the production of vehicles running on natural resource fuels. I agree with
this
 notion as the electric cars are
energy
 efficient and
environment
Suggestion
environmentally
 friendly. Electric cars are
energy
 efficient since they operate on reusable
energy
 sources. While, the fossil fuels undergo irreversible reactions and could be utilized once only
hence
 are being depleted as a consequence of increased consumption.
Moreover
, they are lighter on the pocket as the ever-increasing demand has caused a rise in
fuel
 prices. Electric cars have one time high buying
cost but
Accept comma addition
cost, but
 they are
fuel
 efficient and
hence
 are better in
long run
Suggestion
the long run
.
For example
, Electric cars produced by Mitsubishi have high average and run on
energy
 driven from solar panels. Electricity driven cars are non-polluting. Electric cars run on
electricity
Accept comma addition
electricity, hence
hence
 discharging practically zero pollutants to the air. Decrease in emissions results in
cleaner and safer atmosphere
Suggestion
a cleaner and safer atmosphere
. They
also
 have
advantage
Suggestion
the advantage
an advantage
 of long engine life since there is no knocking effect like in
combustion engine
Suggestion
a combustion engine
combustion engines
 of fossil
fuel
 driven cars.
On the other hand
, toxins like CO2, lead and arsenics are released into the environment in high quantity by the vehicles running on fossil fuels. The recently launched hybrid electric cars by Honda have proven to be
environment
Suggestion
environmentally
 friendly as they have zero expulsion of gases. I support the promotion of increased production of motor vehicles dependent on
use
Suggestion
the use
 of electric
fuel
instead
 of fossil resources.
This
 will in large help preserve the natural surroundings and saving the fossil resources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fossil fuels
  • emissions
  • air pollution
  • greenhouse gases
  • climate change
  • sustainable
  • renewable
  • electric vehicles
  • battery technology
  • charging infrastructure
  • range anxiety
  • government support
  • incentives
  • subsidies
  • renewable energy
  • environmental impact
  • energy efficiency
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