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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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There are some reasons why people in today’s modern society do not get a sense of security wherever they are.
First
, as natural disasters have become one of the most worrying problems all over the world, people may be damaged even they stay at home.
For example
, the number of houses destroyed by tsunamis or earthquakes has been increased in recent decades, which leads to a significant rise in de
alth r
the event of dying or departure from life
death
ate throughout the world, especially in some coastal areas.
Second
, when being outside, individuals tend to worry about being infected due to the spread of the Covid-19 virus recently.
This
 mi
ght has a
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might have
n
s
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a
erious impact on hu
man’s h
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human
ealth or even lead to some unexpected de
alth c
the event of dying or departure from life
death
Death
ases. Possible solutions should be pr
oduce i
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productive
n order to decline the aforementioned pr
olems,
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
which will give people safer places to live in. Fi
rsly,
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Firstly
it is necessary to invent some new techniques that can help minimize the risk of natural-disaster-related accidents.
This
 means that people are exactly forecast and could be able to get rid of the ca
statrophic d
extremely harmful; bringing physical or financial ruin
catastrophic
amages.
Additionally
, people should avoid going to some crowded places as much as possible so that the infection capacity would decrease. These activities positively in
fluence n
Suggestion
will influence
ot only to
day but
Accept comma addition
today, but
also
 future world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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