The graph shows average CO2 emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.

The graph shows average CO2 emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.
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The given line graph illustrates carbon dioxide
emissions
per head in four different European countries from 1967 to 2007. In general, we can see that carbon dioxide
emissions
were noticed the most in Great Britain in 1967.
Furthermore
, CO2
emissions
polluted the environment the least in Portugal in 1967. (were a cause
to
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pollution
/ contributed to
pollution
/ caused
pollution
). What’s more important, Great Britain and Portugal remained at their highest and lowest positions respectively in terms of CO2
emissions
over the span of 40 years. Starting (Beginning / To start) with the UK, we can view that
although
in 1967 Carbon dioxide
emissions
were 11 metric
tonnes
,
afterward
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this
huge number decreased gradually till 2007 to under 10 metric
tonnes
.
In addition
, we can
also
observe that CO2
emissions
rose to their peak point in Sweden in 1977 to almost 11
tonnes
,
however
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pollution
was reduced dramatically until 2007 by approximately 6 metric
tonnes
. Moving on to the CO2 emission results of Italy, we can witness that they went up slowly from 4 to 7 metric
tonnes
between 1967 and 2007.
Next
, when it comes to Portugal, it is
also
worth noting that CO2
emissions
grew rapidly by 4 metric
tonnes
from 1987 to 2007. In comparison with the UK and Sweden where the trend was downward, Italy and Portugal had an upward stream in CO2
emissions
discharge.
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