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Reducing global environment damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent agree or disagree?

#environment #damage #governments #individuals
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In
this
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 day and age, it goes without saying that global warming is a hot topic that people have
concerned
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concerns
.
In addition
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, it is believed that governments should take responsibilities for minimizing the bad effects of global warming.
However
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, it is believed that people can mitigate environmental damage. From my part of views, I support
this
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 view with arguments in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, governments should introduce laws to limit emissions from factories.
Moreover
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, they can reuse energy as solar, water
snd
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 wind power. Actually, they can work out with the organization to protect
green house
of or relating to or caused by the greenhouse effect
greenhouse
 emissions to make
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
 cleaner and healthier. It is
certainly
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certain
 that if governments and individuals should work together. Governments mitigate the problem of over consuming and reduce the fossil fuel usage and people ought to launch
eco
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Eco
 products to safeguard
environment
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the environment
.
Last
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 but not least, governments have to punish strong penalty those destroying forests. In conclusion, global warming is a main threat to human, wildlife and ecosystem of the planet. Both governments and individuals are responsible for reducing global environmental hazards

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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