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Some people think that life is better in cities, however others claim that village life is far better. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people consider living in the large town, whereas other opinions choose the countryside as their place to live. In
this
 essay, I would describe the goods and the drawbacks of having a
life
 in the rural area or city. There are two advantages of living in the metropolitan area.
To begin
 with, why many people do urbanization is because it is offering us many great jobs and higher income. They could only find activities that related to farm if living in the village, while actually, they have abilities to develop something different. The
next
 one is transportations and infrastructure are accessible easily. When spending
life
 in the rural region, usually people have
struggle
Suggestion
struggled
struggles
 like the difficulty in finding bus if they want to take a trip or go to a hospital.
However
, many options of intra-city mobility could be found as easy as pie and the bumpy road is not as much as in the small town.
On the other hand
, be settled in the country
also
 have two two main benefits.
First
, mostly the villagers are more friendly, they know each other even people who live more than ten houses from them.
For example
, people in my hometown always have a talk every morning or afternoon and say hi if meet without stopping, including strangers.
Thus
,
this
 makes people never feel alone.
but
Suggestion
But
 it is different to societies in the urban
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
that is
 cynical to others.
Second
, people would breathe fresh
air which
Accept comma addition
air, which
 we
can not
can not
cannot
 buy and closer to nature. It could happen because there are plenty of huge trees and not much the traffic or the industrial noises.
Additionally
, kinds of vegetables could be planted by ourselves and we could control the pesticide to make sure they are green and clean. All in all, it depends on what kind of
life
 that people prefer. Personally, reside in metropolis area is better to earn some improvements.
However
, people provide little time
to
Suggestion
for
 taking a trip to the rural region in gaining a quiet
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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