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Many people disagree with a school policy which forces children to learn a new language. To what exent do you agree or dissagree?

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It is true that many people don't
want their children be
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want their children to be
 forced to learn a foreign
languange
a systematic means of communicating by the use of sounds or conventional symbols
language
. I think that
have
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having
 a
graps
hold firmly
grasp
 of a new
language
 is valuable in
schools but
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schools, but
 that policy
should'nt
should not
shouldn't
couldn't
 be made compulsory In my opinion, another new
language
 is advantageous for children to learn at
school
. One reason is that it brings to them the opportunity to participate in an exchange programme at
school
. They can absorb knowledge, learn social skills and have fun during that time in other countries. Another reason is that if children are able to speak a foreign
language
, they may find it useful in the future. It could give them more chance of having a good job and help them pursue a successful career
On the other hand
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would argue that children
should'nt
should not
shouldn't
 be forced to learn a new
language
. Some children might not think it's essential for them and the lessons would become bored and meaningless.
Secondly
, with a busy timetable at
school
, pupils may give their priority to study things which
benefits
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will benefit
 them in the
futute
the time yet to come
future
such
 as
mathametics
a science (or group of related sciences) dealing with the logic of quantity and shape and arrangement
mathematics
, literature. In conclusion,
although
 learning a new
language
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Language
 would be useful, fun and challenging for children, I feel that
this
 should not form a compulsory part of the
school
 curriculum.

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