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It is widely acknowledged that gigantic amount of rubbish is producing every day. Huge wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and developing

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It is widely acknowledged that
gigantic amount
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the gigantic amount
 of rubbish is
producing
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produced
 every day. Huge wastage is a concerning problem in both the developed and developing countries.
This
 essay will discuss reasons for increase in waste production and
also
 suggest some possible measure to alleviate the garbage.
Firstly
,
packaging
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the packaging
 is the major cause for enormous production of rubbish. Whether it is necessary or not, large companies will attract the customers with
designed
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designing
 packaging to any
product
. The material used for packaging is not non-biodegradable and will get accumulated in bulk over a period of time.
Secondly
, humans are pleasure seekers, they have adopted used and through policy. People are acquiring new products
instead
 of repairing the older or obsolete items, which
otherwise
 doubling up the same
product
. Some of the companies warranty
also
 will be for a shorter period of time, after that people are no longer interested in repairing the
product
,
as a result
 production of rubbish increasing tremendously. Another key point is that, increasing technology is one of the major factors for immense garbage. People are updated to new products every day, cell phones are the best example sophisticated technology. Every new model is creating tons of
wastage
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waste
 Turning to the possible solution,
government
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the government
 should start implementing strict laws for manufacturing
bio degradable
capable of being decomposed by e.g. bacteria
biodegradable
 products for packaging and designing. Warranty for any
product
 should be for
longer period
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a longer period
longer periods
 so that the consumers can repair the
product
 and reuse it.
Furthermore regular
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Furthermore, regular
 up gradation of technology should be adopted at regular intervals. To conclude, though the government authorities have passed many orders, it is not easy to eradicate wastage. It’s the people who should stop over consumerism and start recycling and bio degradable products
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