Some people think that good health is very important to every person, so medical services should not be run by profit-making companies. Do the advantages of private healthcare outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that private-for-profit medical practices are becoming popular for the public;
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, some people claim that
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services ought not to be operated by private organizations. In my opinion,
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this
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kind of services may be expensive and sometimes provide poor medical services, their current and future benefits exceed any damage that they may cause for both individuals and society. There are two main reasons why private medical systems should not be operated in the
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sector.
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, patients often have to pay exorbitant costs to receive their services. In fact, since governments do not introduce restrictions on
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costs, many private owned hospitals set high fees for services
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as
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charges or using high tech machines in the operating theatres.
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, the costs of treatment in a private institution are more likely double or triple those of a public hospital.
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, a minority of private-making companies tend to focus on maximizing their profits rather than improving the public
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.
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means that these clinics or hospitals may only employ less qualified and less experienced medical practitioners to increase their revenue.
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, despite its disadvantages, it is potentially more advantageous for patients and public
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to maintain private medical services. With regard to the former, compared to community
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systems, a majority of their counterparts are more likely to provide better quality services.
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, if people choose to undergo medical examination and treatment in a private institution,
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as VinMec or FV hospitals, they will be arranged instantly
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a private room equipped with advanced facilities.
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, private
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institutions could be a practical complement, or even a substitution for the public systems in less accessible regions.
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, in mountainous areas in Vietnam, due to the appearance of private clinics, ethnic minority groups could receive primary
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at present. In conclusion, in spite of some certain drawbacks of private
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systems, I believe that their advantages can outweigh the disadvantages because of the convenience in term of its provided services and the benefit of improving nation’s general
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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