Nowadays a large amount of advertising aiming at children should be banned because of negative effects it brings. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

People have different
view
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views
about the adverts which of the target audience are children should be banned due to having detrimental influences on them
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I completely believe as advertisements yet possess some violent scenes and upset the family budget by forming the behaviour of stubbornness in children.
To begin
with, it is undeniable that advertisement has a great impact on people's
lifestyle especially
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lifestyle, especially
, offsprings who are being more influenced by them. It seems that some adverts including some toys and other online games
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nowadays, are flooded with dangerous stunts that children can cope with them
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It is really dangerous
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although
there is a little warning text
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at
the bottom saying " do not make
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an
attempt to do in real life "
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Since little kids can not fully understand the meaning of it
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not to mention their curiosity towards trying to do any interesting things in their younger age
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some left
unattented
not watched
unattended
children do the same acts in reality. Undoubtedly, the consequences of them may end up with big losses or far-reaching damages for both
they
objective case of they
them
and their relatives.
Moreover
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some obstinate children are being encouraged to be owner of new goods by advertising them
simultaneosly
at the same instant
simultaneously
, they are
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being encouraged to be more stubborn
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As a result
, by buying unnecessary things
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family budget can upset
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Such
kind of behaviour
make
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makes
them more persistent not only in shopping but
also
other important things like trying to go internet clubs without permission of their parents or being disrespectful to people in society since they begin thinking of their activities are always acceptable
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Especially, advertising of goods
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on
school
premises including
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premises, including
educational materials have greater influence on pupils, as they think that they have
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an
approval of school authority
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Or when they see their friends with latest smart phones or laptops and force their parents to buy them if they
can not
can not
cannot
buy
then
they are depressed
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In turn
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it damages parents ' pocket. To conclude
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it can be
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evidence
that children's advertisement programmes have negative effects on both children's behaviour and life as well
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they should be banned to provide
young generation
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the young generation
with
better life
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a better life
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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