An international student magazine has invited its readers to submit a letter arguing for immediate action on a key environmental issue. You decide to write a letter, briefly describing an environmental problem that concerns you, explaining why you are arguing for immediate action and recommending appropriate measures to rectify the situation.

Dear Editor, I am writing
this
letter after having come across the request of your magazine to receive readers opinions . I decided to write my response expressing my stand on
this
topic. As human progress is developing, it is inevitable that the natural
world
is, to some extent, impinged in order to supply the energy needs of a thriving society. According to innumerable studies which were carried out on the topic, the increasing human expansion is fostering the deterioration of the environment. The rightful claims about global warming are now exposed to global attention but ,to my mind, other key areas are ignored by public opinion.As
such
,I decided to illustrate my stance on a less "hackneyed" problem,which regards pollinators
in particular
. As Einstein once said "the
world
would end in 8 years without bees" and as far as society is concerned,
this
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insects are of paramount importance in ensuring the reproduction of plants of every sort and , the ones
which
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we derive food
from
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in particular
. Were
this
not enough to outline the enormous effect that living plants have on the environment, one should spare a thought
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the photosynthetic process from which the oxygen we breathe ensues. the cause of pollinators depletion, bees particularly, could be traced back to when pesticides were
first
employed in an attempt to fight off harmful insects,hindering them from ravaging plantations . From my standpoint, by acting as we are,
chemichally
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chemically
chemical
wiping out detrimental pests is inducing the demise of bees as a collateral effect. it comes as no surprise that ,a
world
in which pesticides and poisonous treatments were no longer used would be utopian.The lack of any control on cultures would have a disastrous outcome on global food production, which would be insufficient to supply the needs of a
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developing
world
. What I suggest,
however
, is that governments should encourage scientific enquiry in those areas, bolstering the research on the topic to find new chemical or
biotechnologycal
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biotechnological
-oriented solutions targeted only at a specific species and cracking down on the usage of venomous substances. Yours faithfully

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • therefore
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  • despite

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