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In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #animals #food #medicine
How could people exist without animals? Since primitive era,
human
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humans
the human
 had roasted wild animals for eating, wore raw
fur
 for warming up in frosty winters, or used substances from
animal’s
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animal
 parts as a medicine for curing.
However
, these days, some opinions propose that people no longer need to use these wild species in some purpose of food, clothing or medication.
In
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From
 my own point of view,
besides
unnecessary need
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the unnecessary need
such
 as clothes, animals play undoubtedly crucial roles in people’s lives. Back to
ancient period
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the ancient period
, when human did not
discovered
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discover
 natural fabric originated from plants, they had to use leather or
fur
 as the only warming method so as not to become numb with low temperature. Not only the purpose of maintaining heat for bodies, these clothes become
common
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more common
 and more and more luxury attracting upper class due to their singularity. Thanks to
development
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the development
 of high-quality synthesized fabric production industry,
fur
 clothes
seems
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seem
 needless and even cruel to kill a crocodile or a snake for skin only, or hunt tigers, bears for producing coats while human are totally able to replace by artificial iridescent fabric customs. Despite
negative aspects
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the negative aspects
 of using animals for clothing, people could not live without animals, especially their unique substances. Animal
protein
 sources
such
 as meat, fish, poultry, eggs and dairy are considered to be complete sources of
protein
 because they contain all the essential amino acids that body needs to function effectively.
Protein
 deficiency makes children physically and mentally underdeveloped, kids are susceptible to infections, intelligence is easily
affect
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affected
 badly as well as low height. Not only
protein
, some kinds of wild species release some secretions which enable to cure
human’s
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human
 diseases
such
 as bile bear, snake venom or tiger bone glue. These ingredients are used in the market due to their good effects in treatment that people have not found out
better remedy
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a better remedy
 for substituting. In conclusion,
although
 it is not necessary to use wild species’
fur
 or skin for the purpose of clothing, I outweigh
positive benefits
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the positive benefits
 from animals. Nutritious substances from
them especially
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them, especially
protein
 is so crucial to human’s body that a child cannot develop normally with the lack of animal
protein
.
Moreover
, medicines originated from animals are common in curing some diseases.

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