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It is observed that in many countries not enough student are choosing to study science subjects.

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The popularity of
science
 related subjects has fallen dramatically globally
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 nowadays, ad a decreasing number of young people are opting to study them. The
unprecedently
 low stature of scientists and
science
 related careers in the societies seems to be the prime contributor of
this
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This
 fact may unavoidably slow down the pace of development
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of
 the society
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 in my opinion. The contribution of
science
 and scientists seems to be underestimated everywhere in the world nowadays.
In other words
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 they are paid for lower salaries for their jobs and for the most part struggle to make ends meets
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 Despite possessing much smaller levels of social contribution
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 sports people
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 lawyers and even actors are societies
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This
 fact is serving as a discouraging message far
most young
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more young
 people who are avoiding to study
science
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 I think
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 The recent U.K.
based
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Based
 survey by the Sociology part of the Manchester university can prove
this
 point
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 The healthy part of teenagers in
this
 survey worked the
abovementioned
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above mentioned
 as most prestigious professions and
science
 isolated careers made it to the bottom of their list with lower than 10% of the adolescent participants.
Such
 an unfortunate situation is highly likely to have a knock-on effect on the way these societies develop.
Undeniebly
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Undeniably
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science
 serves as a milestone for the progress of many other fields and without it their developments is unimaginable.Scientific breakthroughs
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 discoveries and achievements alike
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stimulate the fields like medicine
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industry
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education and other infinite number of spheres.
Little interest
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The Little interest
 of young people in
science
 now can bring about a severe deficiency of scientists in the future
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 I believe.
This
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at its turn stops the improvements in the society affecting our lives. To conclude
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societies underestimating the value of
sciences
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the sciences
 in our lives and an unpromising future of
science
relaed
being connected either logically or causally or by shared characteristics
related
 careers are reducing the interest of young people in learning sciences
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In my opinion ,possible negative outcome of
this
 could become the obscure or weekness of progress in our societies in years to come

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