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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people believe that a gap year between school and university is a good idea, while others disagree strongly. Consider both sides of this debate and present your own opinion. You should give reasons for your answer, and include ideas and examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words

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We give reasons for some people who agree with the
gap
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 years and other people who disagree with
gap
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 years between a school and a university We want to talk about the disadvantages.
Firstly
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, the cost involved for the air fees, the accommodation, the application fee, and the living expense. The students for providing
this
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 cost should work, borrowing from someone and
then
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 get back to them or their parents pay these costs.
Second
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. The important thing is the safety of young people. Parents of
students concern
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the students' concern
students' concern
student concern
student's concern
 about their child if being kidnaped or their child travels to remote places.
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finally
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Finally
, the students don’t have a focus on studying or have a distraction from things they learned,
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 damaging the students’ performance.
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.
supporters
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Supporters
 of
gap
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 years say the benefits
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 as get enough time to work in voluntary jobs or sectors of business that interest them.
This
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 causes them to earn money for the college or university or learn new skills that cause greater career skills
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 highlight independence. The
gap
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years maybe
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years, maybe
 give time to
students thing
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the students thing
 about their future In conclusion. a year off can useful the student should plan for it because students get some knowledge and improvement the skills that help them for their future

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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