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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The map illustrates the changes
of
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 the island after the construction. A good point about
this
in
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island
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the island
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 was no tourist attractions.
For example
,
restaurant
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restaurants
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,
accommodation
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accommodations
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,
pier
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a pier
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as well
as
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a
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footpath
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a footpath
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, vehicle
track
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. After
the
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this
 kind of facilities
have
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has
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built
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been built
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.
Overall
, it has created a pier as a roadway
to
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 boats.
Furthermore
, swimming on the beach
available
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is available
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 as well. Reception built up on the connected way of the restaurant.
Likewise
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 they have added accommodation
along with
 footpaths. Vehicle tracks were related to pier, reception and restaurant ways. Despite the palm trees which
located
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are located
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 on the east and west of the island, have kept their numbers,
namely
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 they were not cut.
Besides
 the left side of the eating house is closely visible
of
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 the sea. Accommodations
of
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on
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 the east side have situated nearly to each other with footpaths. In summary, the construction was made to facilitate the tourist spot and destroy
sea-island
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the sea-island
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 atmosphere.

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