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Some people believe that goverments should make the investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via the internet. Duscuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In our modern life, there are discussions about the need in investigating of money in building of public libraries, while
to
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for
until
 the majority of people it seems that it is only the waste of money. Personally,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 believe that it is necessary to keep public libraries and via
this
 way attract people to read more books without using internet. On the one hand, reading books via internet saves people's time, and it is more comfortable, because of his facility of access without going out. People just need internet to download the information what they want.
Furthemore
in addition
Furthermore
, the downloaded information might be read
in
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at
 any time. It is a good opportunity for
workoholics
person with a compulsive need to work
workaholics
 who hasn't got enough time for going to the libraries.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
 do not need them
(
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(
libraries)
On the other hand
, libraries help
to
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of
 the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 to save their cultural values.
Such
 buildings play crucial role in modern generation's education.
Besides
this
, it is really difficult to share the reading atmosphere
to
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with
 the readers through the screen of mobile phones or any other
gadjets
a device or control that is very useful for a particular job
gadgets
. It is
impossibly
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impossible
 to find the quiet
place for
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place, for
 concentration, but libraries provide us
such
 facilities. To summarise, giving to abandon to our social libraries might negatively
effect
have an effect upon
affect
 to the future of youth. And the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
shoul
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
shall
 avoid
of
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by
 making
such
 mistake.
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