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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph represents the different
amount
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amounts
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 of money (in $ Us
dollar
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) that the people of
Germany
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,
France
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, Italy and
Austria
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 spent on buying
books
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 over a period of 10 years from 1995 to 2005.
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, the amount spent on
books
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 over the
10
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10-year
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year
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 period increased in all four countries.
Germany
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 and
France
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 were the first and
second
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 highest
spender
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spenders
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 on
books
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 respectively in 1995. Up until the
year
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 1999, both countries saw
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an
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 increase in spending -$10
million
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 in
Germany
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 and $5
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 dollars in
France
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. Between 1999 and 2001,
France
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 increase their
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 outlay on book purchases,
whereas
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Germany
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’s total expenditure dropped slightly. By 2005,
Germany
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 and
France
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 saw their highest total spent on book purchases and remained the first and
second
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 high spenders. In 1995, Italy was the
third
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 highest spender
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Austria
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 was the fourth highest spender at 30
million
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 dollars, 20
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 dollars behind Italy. By the
year
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 2003, both Italy and
Austria
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 saw increases in the total amount of money spent on
books
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. By the
year
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 2005,
Austria
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 had overtaken Italy to become the
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third highest
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third-highest
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 book purchaser across the four countries.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, second, third, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words germany, france, austria, books, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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