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It is observed that not enough students are choosing to study science. What are the causes of this? What re the effects on society?

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It is true that the
number
 of
science
 students are
becoming ina
Suggestion
is becoming
dequate in different parts of the world nowadays. The essay below will anal
yze som
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
e explanations for
this
 situation as well as its influence on society. There are two principal factors that contribute to the common disinterest in
science
 subjects.
First
, those subjects are often challenging and require a lot of diligence as well as a great deal of patience and intelligence. The
number
 of researches that an average Biology student has to do is more than other subjects with high
er level of
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higher levels
a higher level
both difficulty and commitment, which discourages many students from choosing
science
 as their majors.
Second
, employment opportunities in
this
 particular field are limited and extremely competitive.
Although
 a huge amount of time and effort is spent on
science
 study at school, there is still little chance for them to get a job after graduation. Society greatly suffers from the scarcity of human resources in
science
 fields. Apparently, as the
number
 of
science
 students is insignificant, other majors
such
 as business or economics become prevalent,
hence
 the imbalance in futu
re workforce. In
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the future workforce
 fact, competitiveness increased due to too many degree holders of the same expertise pushes a worrying
number
 of graduates to the verge of unemployment. Another problem is the shortage of
science
 professionals as qualified employees are low in
number
. Unless more students decided to study
science
 at university, sooner or later we would have to face a major human resource crisis. In conclusion, hurdles regarding some strict requirements of
science
 subjects and employment opportunities are
factored in
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factor
a lot of students not choosing
such
 subjects to study, and there are serious problems arising from
this
 situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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