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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
#proportion #population #three #countries
The line graph depicts the percentage of older residents who are part of the USA, SWEDEN and JAPAN countries from 1940 to 2040.
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, it is clearly vivid from the graph that the United States of America and Sweden trends
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 gone through fluctuation as compared to
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Japan. Japan whose population was less in the past years compared to the other countries, but it will beat them in the future, keeping
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Sweden
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second
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 rank and
United
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 States
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third
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