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Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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In Britain, when someone
gets old they
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gets old, they
 often go to old
age
home
.
This
 is
also
 called as
old people's
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an old people's home
old people's homes
home
 or a retirement people's
home
.
Accept space
.
 There they live in a
home
 with
other
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Other
 old
age
 people where there are nurses to look after them.
Firstly
, there can be a
case
 where old
age
people they
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people, they
 don't have children.
Secondly
, there can be a
case
 they have
children but
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children, but
 travelled abroad for their bread and butter and for
thier
of them or themselves
their
 lively hood.
Thirdly
, there can be a
case
 they will have
children but
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children, but
 after their children's marriage
thier
of them or themselves
their
 son-in-law or daughter-in-law are not compatible with them or
vise
a holding device attached to a workbench; has two jaws to hold workpiece firmly in place
vice
 versa. Obviously, in
case
 of no
adjust ment
making or becoming suitable; adjusting to circumstances
adjustment
 with other parties old
age
 people prefer to go and live in
old
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an old age home
age
home
 where they will find
lot
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lots
 of companions of their
age
 and with same like
mentaly
involving the mind or an intellectual process
mental
 people. Now coming to the discussion of who should take
care
 of their expenses. In
case
, if they have children and they are sound enough in wealth, Obviously they have to take
care
 of their expenses. Old
age
 parents will have some expenses,
in addition
 to that, at that
age
 they need some assistant for that nurses are hired. So, these expenses ought to be
bored
have
borne
 by children. When children are not
supporting
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supported
 either they themselves are financially weak to take
care
 of
parents
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parents'
parent's
 expenses or they are neglecting parents in either
case
 government should take
care
 of the old
age
 people. Since
Britan
a monarchy in northwestern Europe occupying most of the British Isles; divided into England and Scotland and Wales and Northern Ireland; 'Great Britain' is often used loosely to refer to the United Kingdom
Britain
, collects
good amount
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the good amount
a good amount
 of taxes, Government
also
 should not have a problem in supporting.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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