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Every country should have a free health service; even if that means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through this service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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healthcare
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Health care
Healthcare
 is a very essential part of our life. So, it is required to each nation to render the free health services, even it cost exorbitantly for a recent medical cases. I agree with
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 concern, but it must have some limitations. I reckon, as every country earns plethora of funds in the form of different taxes.
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, it is their responsibility to raise the specific money to fund the hospital expenses.
as
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As
 any nation's progress
depend
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depends
 on the health of the citizens, so
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 thing always keep in
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 priority. On the other side few medical treatments required overabundance of funds and health department may run lack of finance. So I suggest that
government
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the government
 must create a policy where poor people who falls under BPL (below poverty line) or aged people who do not possess income source only take
this
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 facility as a free, other than these everyone must be charged as the can able to pay the expenses.
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Nonetheless it
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Nonetheless, it
 is not possible to confer the free medication to everyone as it costs huge to
government which
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government, which
 may provide more burden to their wherewithal, so, it is wise decision to give the service as per the people's financial condition.
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, rich nations. Like, America, Russia, or Canada can assist
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in
 other countries
who lack of funds
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who lack funds
 for medical facilities. Named, Nigeria, Combodia, and Nepal. To recapitulate, providing a free hospitalisation is the government's responsibility and it will work if we plan it systematically.

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