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Some people say that parents shoudl encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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While there are people who believe that children should be encouraged to participate in organised group activities when they are free, other people say that it is vital for them to be able to occupy themselves on their own. In my opinion, I think both are very important for the growth of the children and they should find a balance between them. On the one hand, it is essential for children
to join
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joining
 some organised group activities to learn soft skills on how to interact with other people which is essential for their future development.
For example
, participating in a
sport
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sports
 team allows children to learn how to cooperate as a team, deal with conflicts and overcome failures through competitions. If they did not possess these soft skills, they would have difficulties to work with people in the future and would become more vulnerable to failures.
However
, learning to spend
time
 by themselves is as important as learning in groups. Children who are able to manage their free
time
 are more independent because they have the ability to decide what to do by themselves.
Moreover
,
this
 is fast
pace
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paced
 era that we are always surrounded by people, it is essential for us to be able to spend
time
 on our own to feel
refresh
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refreshed
 and
thus
 to have a better mental health.
For instance
, yoga and meditation have become more popular in recent years. In conclusion, I think that children should learn how to find a balance between socialising in group activities and being by themselves in their free
time
 in order to have
a
Suggestion
an
 all-rounded development.

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