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The table gives details of world electricity production by renewable

The table gives details of world electricity production by renewable
#world #electricity #production
The report shows the worldwide
generation
 of
electricity
 in trillion watts hours by five different echo-friendly sources between 2009 and 2012. By and large, it can be
seem
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 that hydraulic
energy
production
 remained
as
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the primary source of
electricity
between
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for
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 all years,
whereas
 solar
electricity
production
 was the least in three out of the four years. In more
detail
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 it is possible to see that between 2011 and 2012 solar
energy
production
 worldwide skyrocketed, almost doubling its initial value in 2011.
On the other
hand
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 geothermal
electricity
generation
 increased almost fifty times less
on
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in
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 the same period, making only a 1.1 Twh gain
on
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production
.
Besides
 that, it can be
seem
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 that in a
four year
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 period wind
electricity
production
 almost doubled,
while
 hydraulic and bio-mass
generation
 only increased
about
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 ten
percent
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 and 30
percent
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 respectively. Impressively, solar
energy
production
 increased
500
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%
in
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at
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 the same timestamp. It can
also
 be said that geothermal
energy
generation
 had the least increase,
of
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 only 3
Twh
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TWh
 in four years, which represents only about
3
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a 3
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%
of
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gain
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the gain
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words generation, electricity, energy, production with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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