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International tourism brought enormous benefit to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants

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People have different views about the effects of international
tourism
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. While there are some positive impacts of
tourism
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, I believe that it has more drawbacks than benefits. The main advantage of international
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 is that it makes up a large proportion of the national income for countries. Travellers bring with them currency, and spent it for their daily products and accommodation by which the shops and hotels make profits.
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, the percentage of the Maldives’s income from
tourism
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 accounts for almost 40% of its GDP. As the number of people increases by the influx of tourists, the population produces greater quantities of waste, which contaminates the rivers and oceans. To illustrate, in Venice motorboats and water trams produces toxic fumes and contaminate water in the canals.
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, fish and dolphins have not been seen in
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this areas
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this area
these areas
 for almost sixty years.
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 to
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tourism
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 may cause a rise in the cost of living in these countries. As many people flock into the area, prices for goods and services increases.
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, in Dubai, which has the highest number of tourists, the costs of accommodation facilities are much higher compared to other countries, and
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 affects the living conditions of local people.

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