The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the main reasons for study among students of different age groups and the amount of support they received from employers.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two bar graphs illustrate the prime intention of learning either for
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career
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a career
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or for interest among the learners of different
age
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categories and how much they get cooperation from the principal.
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, it is vivid from the diagram that there is an inverse relation between the
career
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and interest of
students
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, until they are 39, they obtain education for their employment and during that period employers support them in their education,
meanwhile
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once they are started entering above the
age
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of 49 they started learning for their scrutiny, but during that
age
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group
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they get less aid by the employers.
The around
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fourth fifths of
trainee’s
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trainees
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are keen
in
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on
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learning for their
employment
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employees
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and only one in ten are interested
for
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in
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enjoyment, during that period they get sixty-five
percent
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per cent
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help from their employers in time off and amount until they turn 25 and half of the
students
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get the support when they come under the
age
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between 26 to 29. Unfortunately, the
students
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who fall under the
age
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of 30 to 39
they
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apply
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get only 35% assistance which is less than any other
age
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categories
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category
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as a quarter of
students
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are learning for interest
purpose
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purposes
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. The
students
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who are above the
age
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of 39 and below 50 are almost 40 %, and they are equally interested in their
career
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and engrossment even
they
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though they
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get nearly get
two fifths
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two-fifths
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of benefits.
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, once they become
senior
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seniors
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and 50 or above the
age
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they are less volunteer for
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their career
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career
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careers
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and 70% of
students
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at
this
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age
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are keen on self-interested
as well as
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additionally
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they get more aid compared to the previous
age
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group.
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