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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Sir, My name is
Rupsen
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 Bhimashanakar
Kompe
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Kempe
, I am penning down the epistle to request you about community halls availability to our music reasal. You may know, we do our music practice on Tuesday and Friday evening with our group. we
also
 participate in music competitions. So,
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 with strong opponents we have to do more rehearsal, that's why we need the hall as it is suitable
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 us. Our band is always helpful to our vicinity in many ways. Like, we perform free in any functions of our any society members, as well as, whatever funds we collected from our concerts, we bestow it for
local
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 charity who helps the children or deprived of education.
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, I request you to provide us
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 hall at least a day
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a week, so we can gather there for practice to become more perfect. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully,
Rupsen
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Kompe
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