For many, Shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People however in the past mostly visited those when necessary.

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their free
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and get
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others.
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however
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however,
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in the earlier
principally
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times principally
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visited those when obligatory. I believe that shopping has become an old trend, spending too much
time
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at
malls
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is
putting
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adverse
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affect
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mostly on the young generations, education and health as well.
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with, it is
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that in the modern era, most
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the
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people
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spend their
time
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at shopping plazas rather than
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past. As if the young ones are being attracted by these
places
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. Mostly they are interested
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their classes to meet friends at
malls
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and
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the first preference to eat junk food like pizza, burger, sandwiches and so on.
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, it puts bad hazards on
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healthy life.
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,
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there are various
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products
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be purchased by
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consumers under a single roof
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beauty products, kitchen
appliance
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appliances
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,
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various kind
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kind
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of fruits and vegetables
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as
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well as a number of facilities are provided by the
malls
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like
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air conditioners, escalators, movie theatres,
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and food corners. So, it has become a first preference to spend their
time
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on it as compared to open
places
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and parks. The portion of these
places
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is
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started declining
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the
malls
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. It
puts
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a detrimental effect mostly on the younger generation and the rest of the
people
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also
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, because they always keep away from
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nature.
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me,
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airy environment gives us energy to do daily chores.
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,
people
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urge
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to purchase
that things
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which
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are not necessary
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they spend a large amount of their pocket money
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consequence
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consequence,
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these types of expenditure put them in debt. As well,
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of
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, huge discounts are provided by different brands on their products. I think
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they have more profit in
this
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than consumers because it increased their business. They do fraud with
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owing to
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they can not manage their budget.
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, there are more negative effects on
people
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's
life
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as they become more consumptive. So
people
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should spend their precious
time
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at
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in
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airy
places
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rather than shopping complexes and
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these areas only to pick up essential commodities.

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task response
State a clear opinion in the intro and keep it to the end.
content
Add more clear ideas and support for each point.
coherence
Use simple links between ideas to guide the reader.
grammar
Improve grammar and fix word form mistakes.
structure
The essay has a real topic and a view about malls.
coherence
There are several paragraphs and a brief close.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

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  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
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