In the past shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby. To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Going to shopping used to be a chore for necessary goods, while recently it if though by many to be a leisure activity. In my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
trend has by far more negative impact on society than positive, due to its many drawbacks I will discuss about.
Firstly
, shopping is a
time
and energy consuming hobby which can lead to addiction. Many people nowadays, try to release the stress and tension accumulated during the day or the week spending their revenues
in
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on
unnecessary goods.
As a result
, shopping
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a public area set aside as a pedestrian walk
malls
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are always full of people trying to get over their thoughts and emotions with objects they accumulate in their houses.
For instance
, women who have problems with their image or self-esteem spend a markable amount of
time
in beauty shops buying make up or perfumes, as well as trying clothes which make them feel better.
This
way of facing their troubles is not leading them to a
solution but
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solution, but
is a temporary happiness.
Secondly
,
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a public area set aside as a pedestrian walk
malls
mills
mails
have become amusing places with cafes, plays and cinema, where you can lose your
time
very easily. During the weekend many families, teenagers and couples spend their
time
inside some building with artificial lights and lack of oxygen
instead
of practising sport or other outdoor activities.
Finally
, because people have now more money and credit is available, it is very easy to lose the control
on
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of
the money spent.
For example
, young which
have
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has
less consideration
on
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for
the money, can enter a
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a public area set aside as a pedestrian walk
mall
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with the intent to buy few
things but
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things, but
they can be confused by the many bargains and they came back home with full bags but empty card. In conclusion, I believe shopping regarded as
an
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a
hobby has many negative aspects which can lead people to be
shopaholic
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Shopaholic
, unhealthy and full of debts.
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