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Some people believe that employers should not care about the way their employees dress, because what matter is the quality of their work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In modern life, employees wear unique dresses
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 as custom but some people believe the quality of their
work
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 is important
then
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dress
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 but some people agree with
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 costume.
This
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 essay will take discuss both of sides.
However
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, the advantage of costume is more than disadvantages. Evidence suggests employees dresses are important.
First
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, it is shown who is boss or how is an employee or, in some jobs like policemen should be different because regular people can find them easily.
Second
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, the regular
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 is safe and custom can dirty or destroys and it is not important.
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, in some jobs like firemen can be saved from dangerous events because of the materials, custom isn’t fire so the firemen don’t hurt.
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, employees should
work
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 quality, what clothe to have or not to have because the quality of their
work
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 is important. Another reason is, some employees embrace to separate from other people. They prefer to be like each other. But some people believe the same
dress
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 can be bored at the
work
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 and may be some employees can be depressed. They believe the colourful
dress
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 is better than only one colour or similar. Overall, considering the points discussed above, employees
dress
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 are important and in some situation is necessary.

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