these days in many countries fewer and fewer people want to become teachers ,particularly in secondary schools.what are the reason for this and how could the problem be solved?

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Teaching is a wonderful job. Everyone likes to teach children unless there isn't enough salary for it. As far as I remember
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teaching has often suggested young women should do due to
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lowering
of salary
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It is really hard to support a family as a teacher so men usually does not like
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job. Nowadays, the majority of women
wants
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want
are wanting
to be independent.They want jobs with high salary so they don't want to become teachers too.
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major issues is
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the responsibility
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Teachers always take up a lot of responsibilities.
children
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Children
are becoming naughtier and more rude.They disobey teachers and behave
rudly
in an impolite manner
rudely
toward teachers. Their parents pay way more attention to them so teachers can not control them easily. Being a teacher is an important
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job
because they bring up our children and children are a future society so we have to care about teachers more.
Educational system
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The educational system
An educational system
has to pay enough money to them
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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