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Governments should be responsible for funding and controlling scientific research rather than private organizations. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #research #organizations
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 of being conducted by private companies, important scientific
research
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 must be managed and administered by the governments, according to the opinions of many. I personally believe that private companies should be given their own freedom in doing
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, but with sufficient and proper monitoring from the government. On one hand, it is true that scientific
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 should not be only conducted by the government. The main reason is that the scope of scientific
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 is diverse and wide, and private companies could cover up some
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 which is not carried out by the governments. Many private institutions or individuals' discoveries are useful for the humanity, as we can learn from the past.
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, Thomas Alva Edison was an individual inventor who has greatly contributed to the world with his inventions
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 as the light bulb, motion pictures, phonograph and so on. We should notice that the invention was not the main focus of the government’s
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 during that time, and thanks to Edison we have electric light today.
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 private companies give the right to do scientific
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, they must be strictly monitored by the governments. They must be controlled, as some of them might be doing it for their monetary gain or for destructive weapons.
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, some companies might focus on developing biochemical weapons, and it could threaten the world peace. It is the governments’ job to prevent and block these kinds of
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. In conclusion, I do not agree that scientific
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 should only be conducted by the governments. It is a fact that the scope of scientific
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 is huge.
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Therefore private
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Therefore, private
 companies should be allowed in doing
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.
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, I do agree with the
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that is
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 done by private companies must be reviewed, and monitored by the governments in order to avoid any misappropriation.
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